There was a motorbike doing burnouts and Henry was riding on black ice which you all should no what it is the frozen water but the rubber dd not stick to the frozen water.And he was showing of to some people that did not like Henry but he trying to hared but he fell of the back of the motorbike.And he broke his arm and he fell in to the frozen water.And then as soon as i seen Henry crash into the frozen lake so i ran as fast as i can over to help my friend Henry but on the way there i seen rubber on…

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  1. Congratulations on your response to this week’s challenge Tyler. I can see you were keen to get your ideas written down! It is easy to get caught up expressing your ideas, and forget about punctuation. Punctuation is important to your reader – it makes writing easier to understand. A good strategy is to read your text aloud so you can hear where punctuation should go, or you could ask a friend to help you edit. I hope I get to read more of your writing.

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